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Writing task 2 map about 1920 and now evaluation

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The provided two map illustrated the same location of Grange park in 1920 as beginning period and now, after establishing a lot of infrastructures of development in the areas. Overall, a number of change occurred in the area in the given time. The materialistic changes such as concerts, cafe, water feature, parking space and so on. At first glance from the first maps, the centre area was covered with fountain and musicians stage while the left corner of East belts experienced as beautiful watermark for plant and rose garden. Similarly, the glass House located in the western corner in the park near by entrance. The park had two entrance between the foundation area as centre of the park. There were provided numerous seats for visitors who can enjoy there. Looking closely at second maps, the park witnessed significant change, however the two main entrance will remain stable through out the timeline. Moreover, the fountain was converted into the rose garden. The glass House was displayed by the water feature and car park spots. The seats were removed which was build for visitors in 1920. There were added new amenities as cafe, children's playground, concerts as turned by rose garden, ponds, musicians stage respectively.
The provided two
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map
illustrated the same location of Grange
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park
in 1920 as beginning period and
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now
, after establishing
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a lot of
infrastructures of development in the
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areas
.
Overall
, a number of
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change
occurred in the
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area
in the
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given
time. The materialistic
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changes
such as concerts,
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cafe
, water feature, parking space and
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so
on. At
first
glance from the
first
maps, the
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centre
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area
was covered
with fountain and musicians stage while the
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left
corner of East belts experienced as
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beautiful
watermark for plant and rose garden.
Similarly
, the glass
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House
located in the western corner in the
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park
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near by
entrance. The
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park
had
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two entrance
between the foundation
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area
as
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centre
of the
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park
. There
were provided
numerous seats for visitors who can enjoy there. Looking
closely
at second maps, the
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park
witnessed significant
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change
,
however
the two main entrance will remain stable
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through out
the timeline.
Moreover
, the fountain
was converted
into the rose garden. The glass
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House
was displayed
by the water feature and car
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park
spots. The seats
were removed
which was build for visitors in 1920. There were
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added
new amenities as
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cafe
, children's playground, concerts as turned by rose garden, ponds, musicians stage
respectively
.
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IELTS academic Writing task 2 map about 1920 and now evaluation

Academic
  American English
1 paragraphs
203 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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