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The graph shows information about tourists who visited to Caribbean island from 2010 to 2017.

The graph shows information about tourists who visited to Caribbean island from 2010 to 2017. eEDMx
The illustration depicts information about the number of visitors went to Caribbean island from 2010 to 2017. Units measured in millions. Overall, whole number and type of visitors increased till the end of 2017. In 2010 only 250 thousand of visitors prefered to stay on cruise ships and it was the lowest rate as in 2012. In 2017, due to total vacationers saw its peak, other two type of visitors also underwent the highest rate in that year about 3. 5, 2 and 1. 5 million respectively. There was one drop in both type of visitors and vacationers stayed on island experienced it like a slight decrease about 1 million and 250 thousand in 2016. But in the next year it became the same as 2015 approximately 1. 5 million. Whole number of travelers rised without any falls, except for 2016, it stayed steady. The number of vacationers stayed on cruise ships were always less than island visitors except for 2017 year.
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island from 2010 to 2017. Units measured in millions.
Overall
, whole
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number
and type of
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visitors
increased till the
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end
of 2017.

In 2010
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only
250 thousand of
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visitors
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prefered
to stay on cruise ships and it was the lowest rate as in 2012. In 2017, due to total vacationers
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saw
its peak, other two type of
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visitors
also
underwent the highest rate in that year about 3. 5, 2 and 1. 5 million
respectively
. There was one drop in both type of
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visitors
and vacationers stayed on island experienced it like a slight decrease about 1 million and 250 thousand in 2016.
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But
in the
next
year it became the same as 2015 approximately 1. 5 million.

Whole
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number
of travelers
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rised
without any falls,
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except for
2016, it stayed steady. The
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number
of vacationers stayed on cruise ships were always less than island
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visitors
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except for
2017 year.
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IELTS academic The graph shows information about tourists who visited to Caribbean island from 2010 to 2017.

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6.0
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