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The graphs shows data about the Saturday sales of Bennie's Buns and Lovely's Loaves in London in 2010

The graphs shows data about the Saturday sales of Bennie's Buns and Lovely's Loaves in London in 2010 q0PdP
The average number of items sold of Lovely Loaves and Bernie's Buns on Saturday is outlined in the chart. The data was collected in London in 2010. It is clear that the numbers of Lovely Loaves and Bernie's Buns in doughnuts were greatest value among the statistics whereas the opposite was true for Lovely Loaves in toasted sandwiches and Bernie's Buns in salads The sales which was sold in Bernie's Buns more than they were in Lovely Loaves were cakes, cookies, rolls, toasted sandwiches, crisps, doughnuts. Most considerably, the quantity of Bernie's Buns in doughnuts stood at nearly 140, while that of Lovely Loaves was significantly lower, at 120. The volume of Bernie's Buns in cookies reached under 120, which was 50 higher than Lovely Loaves 's volume. In terms of cakes, the figure for Bernie's Buns added up to approximately 100 in comparison with under 80 for that of Lovely Loaves. The categories of rolls and crisps had roughly similar statistics Specifically, approximately 70 was the figure of Bernie's Buns, whereas that of Lovely Loaves 30 lower. The number of Bernie's Buns in toasted sandwiches was about 27, which was slightly 3 higher than That of Lovely loaves. By contrast, the quantity of items sold of Lovely Loaves in fresh loaves and salad was more than Bernie's Buns. In detail, the volume of Lovely Loaves in salad stood at over 60, while that of Bernie's Buns was significantly lower, at under 20. As for fresh loaves, the number of Lovely Loaves and Bernie's Buns were calculated respectively at about 50 and 40.
The average
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Loaves
and Bernie's
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Buns
on Saturday
is outlined
in the chart. The data
was collected
in London in 2010.

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and Bernie's
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in doughnuts were
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greatest
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in toasted sandwiches and Bernie's
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in salads

The sales which
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in Bernie's
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Buns
more than they were in
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Lovely
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Loaves
were cakes, cookies, rolls, toasted sandwiches, crisps, doughnuts. Most
considerably
, the quantity of Bernie's
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Buns
in doughnuts stood at
nearly
140, while that of
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Lovely
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Loaves
was
significantly
lower, at 120. The volume of Bernie's
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Buns
in cookies reached under 120, which was 50 higher than
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Lovely
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Loaves
's volume. In terms of cakes, the figure for Bernie's
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Buns
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added
up to approximately 100
in comparison
with under 80 for that of
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Lovely
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. The categories of rolls and crisps had roughly similar statistics
Specifically
, approximately 70 was the figure of Bernie's
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Buns
, whereas that of
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Lovely
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Loaves
30 lower. The
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number
of Bernie's
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Buns
in toasted sandwiches was about 27, which was
slightly
3 higher than That of
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Lovely
loaves.

By contrast, the quantity of items sold of
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Lovely
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Loaves
in fresh
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loaves
and salad was more than Bernie's
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Buns
. In detail, the volume of
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Lovely
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Loaves
in salad stood at over 60, while that of Bernie's
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Buns
was
significantly
lower, at under 20. As for fresh
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loaves
, the
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number
of
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Lovely
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and Bernie's
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were calculated
respectively
at about 50 and 40.
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