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The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Below is a summary as well as comparision for a ten year period between the foreign students and native students who have enroled in Australian universities. According to the graph the overseas and local students enroling to the universities have increased over the past decade which are depicted by red and blue curves repectively. The number of students from outside the country were always more compared to the local students count. In the beginning of the century, overseas students count was 20000 and towards the end of the decade the number grew more than four times whereas the local students was always about half the number. There has been little growth in the local students statistics till mid 2000 however, the count has grown drastically over the past 5 years. Summerise the enrolment statistics in Australian universities, the passion to study in a foreign university has always been higher. it gives me immense joy to see the local students showing interest after 2005
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comparision
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ten year
period between the foreign
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students
and native
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students
who have
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enroled
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universities
. According to the graph the overseas and
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local
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students
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enroling
to the
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universities
have increased over the past decade which
are depicted
by red and blue curves
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repectively
.

The number of
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students
from outside the country were always more compared to the
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local
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students
count. In the beginning of the century, overseas
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students
count was 20000 and towards the
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end
of the decade the number grew more than four times whereas the
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local
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students
was always about half the number. There has been
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little
growth in the
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local
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students
statistics till mid 2000
however
, the count has grown
drastically
over the past 5 years.

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Summerise
the
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enrolment
statistics in Australian
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universities
, the passion to study in a foreign
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university
has always been higher.
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it
gives me immense joy to
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see
the
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local
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students
showing interest after 2005

IELTS academic The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period.

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