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The diagram shows the recycling process of aluminium cans.

The provided diagram illustrate the process in which aluminum cans are recycling. Whereas this process contain seven stages. As an overall trend, this is a multistage process which starts from the usage of cans and end on reusing the same cans. As is presented in diagram, first used aluminum cans are thrown into trash bins from where that rubbish is collected through a truck. After that the garbage is send to a factory where the cleaning, sorting, shredding and compressing of the aluminum cans is done. Subsequently to that cleaned and sorted cans are put into a container where heat is is provide and this help them in melting. Afterwards a 2. 5mm to 6mm thick roll is produce by the aluminum liquid. Just after that recycling of can is complete by giving the can its shape with aluminum roll. Nextly cans are labeled by the companies and this cycle is then repeated.
The provided diagram illustrate the process in which
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aluminum
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cans
are recycling.
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Whereas
this process contain seven stages.

As an
overall
trend, this is a multistage process which
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starts
from the usage of
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cans
and
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end
on reusing the same cans.

As
is presented
in diagram,
first
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used
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aluminum
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cans
are thrown
into trash bins from where that rubbish
is collected
through a truck. After that the garbage is
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send
to a factory where the cleaning, sorting, shredding and compressing of the
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aluminum
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cans
is done
.
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Subsequently
to that cleaned and sorted
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cans
are put
into a container where heat
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is is
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provide
and this
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help
them in melting. Afterwards a 2.
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5mm
to
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6mm
thick roll is produce by the
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aluminum
liquid.
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Just
after that recycling of
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can
is complete by giving the
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can
its shape with
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aluminum
roll.
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Nextly
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cans
are labeled
by the
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companies
and this cycle is then repeated.
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IELTS academic The diagram shows the recycling process of aluminium cans.

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3 paragraphs
153 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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