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The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period. Vap7
The graph demonstrates the admissions of abroad students and local students in Australian universities from 2001 to 2010. Overall, total number of overseas students increased drametically in given period of time. Firstly, 20, 000 overseas students enrolled in australian university in 2001, on the contrary, 40, 000 local students admitted in the same year. Total number of international students increase rapidly over 10 years period and reach to it's peak at about 81000 in year 2010, at the same time around 61000 local students got enlisted in university. Number of local commencing in 2001 was about 12000, which was slightly higher than overseas beginnners. This number keep fluctuated in 10 years of period and remain almost same in 2010, while This amount in overseas students went up sharply to almost 41000.
The graph demonstrates the admissions of abroad
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and
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local
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students
in Australian universities from 2001 to 2010.
Overall
, total number of
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overseas
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students
increased
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drametically
in
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given
period of time.

Firstly
, 20, 000
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overseas
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students
enrolled in
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australian
university in 2001,
on the contrary
, 40, 000
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local
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students
admitted in the same
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year
. Total number of international
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students
increase
rapidly
over 10 years period and reach to it's peak at about 81000 in
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year
2010, at the same time around 61000
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local
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students
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got
enlisted in university.

Number of
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local
commencing in 2001 was about 12000, which was
slightly
higher than
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overseas
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beginnners
. This number
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keep
fluctuated in 10 years of period and remain almost same in 2010, while This amount in
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overseas
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students
went up
sharply
to almost 41000.
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IELTS academic The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period.

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