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The charts show how tourism to two countries changed over a 50-year period. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The pie charts displays the information of changes of tourism of two countries which are Australia and Germany over the period of five decades from 1960-2010. Overall, according to charts, it can be seen that Asian people showed highest interest in visiting Australia and Germany whereas European resulted less and economical fluctuation was seen by people of other countries. At first, Europeans people resulted giant enjoyment in visiting Australia with 53% for tour purpose in 1960 which significantly dive down to 10% in the year 2010. Secondly, more than tripled proportion was observed among the Asian citizen visiting Australia from 10% to 63% throughout the period. Additionally, there has been minor change of individuals for tourism in Germany. In 1960, the residence of UK visiting Germany were 20%, which collapsed to 6% in the year 2010. Moreover, rate of European people for tour in Germany decline from 45% to 40% throughout the years.

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 of tourism of two countries which are Australia and Germany over the period of five decades from 1960-2010.

Overall
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seen
 that Asian You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
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showed
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highest
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seen
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people
 of other countries.

At first
, Europeans You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
 resulted giant enjoyment in visiting Australia with 53% for tour purpose in 1960 which significantly
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dive down
 to 10% in the year 2010. Secondly
, more than tripled proportion was observed
 among the Asian citizen visiting Australia from 10% to 63% throughout the period.

Additionally
, there has been minor This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :alteradjust
change
 of individuals for tourism in Germany. In 1960, the residence of UK visiting Germany were 20%, which collapsed to 6% in the year 2010. Moreover
, rate of European You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
 for tour in Germany decline from 45% to 40% throughout the years. 