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The line graph portrays information regarding to foreign language taken by 13-year-old students in particular school from 2000 until present.

The line graph portrays information regarding to foreign language taken by 13-year-old students in particular school from 2000 until present. qGww

The line graph portrays information regarding to foreign language taken by 13-year-old students in particular school from 2000 until present. Overall, Mandarin climbed significantly from 2000 to 2005 before rose steadily until present, whereas French plunged considerably from the beginning of first millennia to year 2005 then stepped down gradually and hit the lowest number by now. By 2000, around 150 students took French as language option and this was a peak point before dive to the lowest point at approximately 90 students in 2005. The student’s number seemed to show a bit rise to one hundred students then followed by steadily depletion into the point less than 85 participants. In contrast, at the same period, the students who were enthusiast for learning Mandarin skyrocketed into the highest value at more than 75 students. After that, from 2005-2008, the Mandarin’s learner fluctuated at around more and less 62 students. Following to that, the students choosing Mandarin have been increasing gradually since 2008 till present year.

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 school from 2000 until present.

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 until present, whereas French plunged considerably
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By 2000, around 150 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withundergraduatescholarpupiljuniorgraduate
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before
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 a bit rise to one hundred You use this word too often, consider replacing it withundergraduatescholarpupiljuniorgraduate
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 depletion into the point less than 85 participants.

In contrast
, at the same period, the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withundergraduatescholarpupiljuniorgraduate
students
 who were enthusiast for learning Mandarin skyrocketed into the highest value at more than 75 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withundergraduatescholarpupiljuniorgraduate
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. After that, from 2005-2008, the Mandarin’s learner fluctuated at around more and less 62 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withundergraduatescholarpupiljuniorgraduate
students
. Following to that, the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withundergraduatescholarpupiljuniorgraduate
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 choosing Mandarin have been increasing gradually
 since 2008 till present year. 