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The table illustrates the salaries of high school teachers in 2009 in five different countries.

The table illustrates the salaries of high school teachers in 2009 in five different countries. pjnd
The table illustrates the salaries of high school teachers in 2009 in five different countries. The parameters it analyzes are: Salaries at the starting of their career, after 15 years of teaching and the maximum salary that teachers could reach. Furthermore, the table shows the number of years to reach the maximum salary. When teachers start their career Luxembourg offers the highest salary with 80, 000 followed by Denmark, Japan, Korea and with the lowest value Australia that gives merely 28, 000. It is essential to analyze the salary after 15 years, Luxembourg continues to be the countries with the highest salary with the value of 119, 000, no other countries reach similar value. While Australia that was the last when career's starting now after 15 years shows the same value of Korea 48, 000. For what to concerns the maximum of salary, the values increase for Luxembourg, Japan and Korea, on the contrary, values are the same for Australia and Denmark with 40, 00 and 54, 000. To reach the maximum salary in Australia and Denmark is possible in 9 years for the first and 8 years for the second. In Luxembourg, Japan and Korea, of course, the maximum salary is higher than Australia and Denmark but are necessary many years to reach it.
The table illustrates the
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of high school teachers in 2009 in five
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The parameters it analyzes are:
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Salaries
at the starting of their career, after 15 years of teaching and the maximum
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that teachers could
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the number of years to
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the maximum salary.

When teachers
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their career Luxembourg offers the highest
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with 80, 000 followed by Denmark, Japan, Korea and with the lowest
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Australia that gives
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28, 000.

It is essential to analyze the
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after 15 years, Luxembourg continues to be the countries with the highest
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with the
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of 119, 000, no other countries
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similar
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. While Australia that was the last when career's starting
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after 15 years
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the same
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of Korea 48, 000.

For what to concerns the maximum of
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, the values increase for Luxembourg, Japan and Korea,
on the contrary
, values are the same for Australia and Denmark with 40, 00 and 54, 000.

To
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the maximum
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in Australia and Denmark is possible in 9 years for the
first
and 8 years for the second.

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, the maximum
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is higher than Australia and Denmark
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IELTS academic The table illustrates the salaries of high school teachers in 2009 in five different countries.

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