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The graphs below show the enrolments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period.

The graph illustrates admissions of students in australian universities in the categories of local and abroad over a ten year period from 2001 to 2010. Overall, the graph of overseas and local nationals experience a gradual and steady increase throughout the period with minor fluctuations in the graph of local people. In the year 2001, there were 20, 000 local students enrolled in the australian universities which gradually increased to an approximate number of 82000 by 2010. In the year 2003, the graph is evidenced to experience a slight increase in the number of admissions approximately by 3000 students per year. Whereas, the average increase throughout is approximately 5000 students in an year. The timeline 2008-2009 experiences a rapid surge in the number by 10, 000 students later on in the next year period (2009-2010) the increase in the number was not as much as before but was significant by enrolling students accounting to a number of 7000 (approximately). The number of overseas students in the year 2001 was approximately 11000 which experienced a significant increase throught out he upcoming years accounting to 41000 students in the year 2010 with an average increase of 2000 students per year. The timeline 2008-2009 experiences a hge amount of increase in the international student admissions accounting to 8000 students (approximately).
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universities in the categories of
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and abroad over a ten
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period from 2001 to 2010.

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of overseas and
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nationals
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a gradual and steady
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throughout the period with minor fluctuations in the
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of
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In the
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2001, there were 20, 000
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local
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enrolled in the
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australian
universities which
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of 82000 by 2010. In the
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2003, the
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is evidenced
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period (2009-2010) the
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was significant by enrolling
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accounting to a
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of 7000 (approximately).

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of overseas
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2001 was
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11000 which experienced a significant
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upcoming years accounting to 41000
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2010 with an average
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