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The graphs below show the enrollments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period. v.2

The graphs below show the enrollments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period. v. 2
The two graphs show student enrollment trends over a ten-year period, from 2000-2010, in Australian universities. Overall, the two graphs clearly demonstrate increasing demand for Australian university education by overseas students (increasing 400%) with a significantly smaller increase by local students (just 50%) for this period. The first graph clearly shows that new overseas students continue to enroll in Australian universities. In 2010 there were approximately 80, 000 overseas students (around half of whom were new students). The rate of increase in the number of international students has been dramatic, doubling every five years, from just under 9, 000 in 2000, to 10, 00 in 2005 and then over 20, 000 in 2010. The local student population was around 600, 000 in 2010, 200, 000 of which were new students. Thus, new students comprised 33% of the local total, which represents a significant decline from 50% ten years before. The trends clearly demonstrate that growth can be expected to continue from overseas students but not for local students.
The two graphs
show
student
enrollment trends over a ten-year period, from 2000-2010, in Australian universities.
Overall
, the two graphs
clearly
demonstrate increasing demand for Australian university education by
overseas
students
(increasing 400%) with a
significantly smaller
increase by
local
students
(
just
50%) for this period.

The
first
graph
clearly
shows
that
new
overseas
students
continue to enroll in Australian universities. In 2010 there were approximately 80, 000
overseas
students
(around half of whom were
new
students)
. The rate of increase in
the


number
of international
students
has been dramatic, doubling every five years, from
just
under 9, 000 in 2000, to 10, 00 in 2005 and then over 20, 000 in 2010.

The
local
student
population was around 600, 000 in 2010, 200, 000 of which were
new
students
.
Thus
,
new
students
comprised 33% of the
local
total, which represents a significant decline from 50% ten years
before
. The trends
clearly


demonstrate
that growth can be
expected
to continue from
overseas
students
but
not for
local
students
.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS academic The graphs below show the enrollments of overseas students and local students in Australian universities over a ten year period. v. 2

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