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The graphs above represent about the rates of computer ownership during 2002 to 2010; and the comparison of computer ownership by education level in the year of 2002 and 2010.

The graphs above represent about the rates of computer ownership during 2002 to 2010; and the comparison of computer ownership by education level in the year of 2002 and 2010. GNr52

It is noticeable that the computer ownership gradualy inclined during that period, at the first and the last year of the data shows that the computer ownership dominated by postgraduate qualification. The computer ownership in general raised between 2002 and 2010. In the year of 2002, there was only more than half of people that own computer. Based on the data, the percentage inclined steadily around 5% per 2 years. At 2010, the computer ownership hit the peak around 85%. The computer ownership divided into 5 levels of education. All of education level illustrates the raise of computer ownership. Postgraduate qualification hits the number of almost 100% in 2010 that own computer. Meanwhile people with no high school diploma has the least rate with only 40% of them that have computer in 2010.

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