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The bar chart shows the percentages of the UK workforce in five major industries in 1841 and 2011.

The bar chart shows the percentages of the UK workforce in five major industries in 1841 and 2011. aqV2P
The barplot compares proportions of UK populations occupied in five major industrial sectors in 1841 in 2011. The clear trend is that the service industry became dominant, while the primary sector decreased. In 1841, nine-fifths of the British workforce worked in three economic areas. Thirty-six per cent of workers were associated with manufacturing and 3 per cent less in the service industry. A slightly smaller proportion of 22 per cent worked in agriculture and fishing. What stands out is that the situation had changed significantly in 2011. The primary industry had depleted by a factor of four, and the food production sector had become twenty times smaller. By contrast, there had been an almost threefold growth in the service sector which became dominant in 2011. In addition, there had been a slight rise in the number of construction employees from 5 to 8 per cent. At the same time, a threefold shrinkage to 1 per cent in the energy and water industry had occurred.
The
barplot
compares proportions of UK populations occupied in five major industrial
sectors
in 1841 in 2011. The
clear
trend is that the service
industry
became dominant, while the primary
sector
decreased.

In 1841, nine-fifths of the British workforce worked in three economic areas. Thirty-six per cent of workers
were
associated with manufacturing and 3 per cent less in the service
industry
. A
slightly
smaller proportion of 22 per cent worked in agriculture and fishing.

What stands out is that the situation had
changed
significantly
in 2011. The primary
industry
had depleted by a factor of four, and the food production
sector
had become twenty times smaller. By contrast, there had been an almost threefold growth in the service
sector
which became dominant in 2011.
In addition
, there had been a slight rise in the number of construction employees from 5 to 8 per cent. At the same time, a threefold shrinkage to 1 per cent in the energy and water
industry
had occurred.
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IELTS academic The bar chart shows the percentages of the UK workforce in five major industries in 1841 and 2011.

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