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we were given a bar chart showing the number of visitors to four different museums from June to October in the UK

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The bar graph illustrates the number of visitors who were visiting the four various museums between June and October in 2015 in the UK. To begin with, just above 400 thousands people were interesting in History museum in June. There was a slight drop in the next month at almost 400, 000 visitors, but in August, there was dramatic increase to 600, 000 visitors. Then for this museum, people were declining until October, which was more than 420, 000 visitors. Furthermore, for the British museum, that is the same pattern as history museum. In June and July, approximately 410 thousands visitors were visiting this museum, Yet in month of August, it was the highest than other museums, which was about 710, 000 visitors. In the last two months, there was counties decreasing in number of visitors. Similarly for national museum, visitors who were the lowest attracted for this museum rather than other museums. About 200, 000 and less visitors went this museum in mentioned all months except August, there was climbing in August at more than 300 thousands visitors. However, the maximum visitors were visiting science museum in June month, which was the nearly 430 thousands. There was a slight down in July and August. Interestingly, the visitors grew significantly in the following month that accounted for 500, 000, but in the last month, it was declined to 300 thousands visitors. Overall, it can be seen from the graph that the greatest visitors were going to British museum in August; on the contrary, the lowest people who were visiting national museum.

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