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The graph shwed the unemployment situations in Australia in 2012 year

The graph shwed the unemployment situations in Australia in 2012 year E7B0q
the line chart illustrates the proportion of condition of unemployment in two areas of australia city in four quarters in the period 2012. it is clear from the graph that the urban and rural areas percentages has fluctuated over quarters of the year. According to what is shown, in the first quarter of rural area’s rate its started with around 6. 7%, then dropped in the second period to reach 4. 5 approximately. In the first month of the third quarter the percentage raised and declined in the end month of the third quarter to peak 6%. therefore, in the last period the rate fluctuate and managed to reach the same rate of the prior period. In addition to the urban areas’ percentage began with nearly 2. 1% percent and grew during two quarters to peak 4. consequently, the rate is witnessed decreased in the third period to reach the same percent with the first period, raising again and had a small drop around 3 in the fourth quarter. In the meanwhile, the percentage soared up to reach 4. 9% which was the nearby ratio to the rural areas in the end period. To sum up we could say that the percentage of unemployment in the rural areas in the first three months of 2012 year was higher than urban, and in the three last months was approximately in the same percent.
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2012.
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was approximately in the same percent.
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IELTS academic The graph shwed the unemployment situations in Australia in 2012 year

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