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THE DIAGRAM BELOW SHOW THE CAHNGE THAT HAVE TAKEN PLACE AT WEST AORK SECNDARY SCHOOL SINCE ITS CONTRUCTION IN 1950.

THE DIAGRAM BELOW SHOW THE CAHNGE THAT HAVE TAKEN PLACE AT WEST AORK SECNDARY SCHOOL SINCE ITS CONTRUCTION IN 1950. eEgkB
THE PROVIDED MAPS ILLUSTRATES THE SUBSTITUTE OCCURS AT WEST PARK SECONDARY SCHOOLS IN SIXTY YEARS BY DIFFERENT YEARS (1950, 1980 AND 2010). OVERALL THE HOUSES IN FIRST PERIOD IS DEMOLISHED WHEREAS, THE CAR PARK IS INTRODUCED IAFTER 30 YEARS AND EXPANDED IN FINAL TERM. IT CAN BE CLEARLY SEEN THAT, THE WEST PARK SECONDARY SCHOOL EXPERIENCED A CONSTRUCTIVE DEVELOPMENT TILL 2010. THE MAIN ROADS IN NORTH SIDE REMAINS THE CONSTANT IN EVERY GIVEN PERIOD, THE HOUSES IN WEST SIDE OF MAP IS DECOSNTRUCTED IN 1980, WHICH IS REPLACED BY CAR PARK AND SCIENCE BLOCK EQUALLY, MOREOVER, IN SOUTH WEST SIDE THE FARMLAND IN FORMER MAP RENAMED AS SPORTS FIELD AND SHRINKS IN LATTER YEARS MAP. THE CAR EXPANDS DRASCTICALLY FROM 1980 TO 2010. THE SIZE OF PLAYGROUND CONTRACTS IN 2010.
THE PROVIDED
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ILLUSTRATES
THE SUBSTITUTE OCCURS AT WEST
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PARK
SECONDARY SCHOOLS IN SIXTY YEARS BY
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DIFFERENT
YEARS (1950, 1980 AND 2010).

OVERALL
THE
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HOUSES
IN
FIRST
PERIOD
IS DEMOLISHED
WHEREAS, THE CAR
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PARK
IS INTRODUCED
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IAFTER
30 YEARS AND EXPANDED IN FINAL TERM.

IT CAN BE
CLEARLY
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THAT, THE WEST
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SECONDARY SCHOOL EXPERIENCED A CONSTRUCTIVE DEVELOPMENT TILL 2010. THE MAIN ROADS IN NORTH SIDE REMAINS THE CONSTANT IN EVERY
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GIVEN
PERIOD, THE
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HOUSES
IN WEST SIDE OF
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MAP
IS
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DECOSNTRUCTED
IN 1980, WHICH
IS REPLACED
BY CAR
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PARK
AND SCIENCE BLOCK
EQUALLY
,

MOREOVER
, IN SOUTH WEST SIDE THE FARMLAND IN FORMER
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MAP
RENAMED AS SPORTS FIELD AND SHRINKS IN LATTER YEARS
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MAP
. THE CAR EXPANDS
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DRASCTICALLY
FROM 1980 TO 2010. THE SIZE OF PLAYGROUND CONTRACTS IN 2010.
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