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The graph shows underground station passenger numbers in London.

The graph shows underground station passenger numbers in London. mqn8
The graph shows the fluctuations in the number of people at a London underground station over a course of day. The busiest time of the day is in the morning. There is a sharp increase 6: 00 and 8: 00, with 400 people using the station at 8 o'clock. After this the number drop quickly to less than 200 at 10 o'clock. Between 11am and 3 pm the number rises, with a plateau of just 300 people using the station. In the afternoon, numbers decline, with less than 100 using the station at 4pm. There is then a rapid rise to a peak of 380 at 6pm. After 7pm, numbers fall significantly, with only a slight increase again at 8pm, tailing off after 9pm. Overall, the graph shows that the station is most crowded in the early morning and early evening periods.
The graph
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the fluctuations in the
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of
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people
at a London underground
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station
over a course of day. The busiest time of the day is in the morning. There is a sharp increase 6: 00 and 8: 00, with 400
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people
using the
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station
at 8 o'clock.
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this the
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drop
quickly
to less than 200 at 10 o'clock. Between 11am and 3 pm the
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number
rises, with a plateau of
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300
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people
using the
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station
. In the afternoon,
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numbers
decline, with less than 100 using the
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station
at 4pm. There is then a rapid rise to a peak of 380 at 6pm. After 7pm,
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fall
significantly
, with
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a slight increase again at 8pm, tailing off after 9pm.

Overall
, the graph
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that the
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is most crowded in the early morning and early evening periods.

IELTS academic The graph shows underground station passenger numbers in London.

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