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The chart below shows the electricity consumption in different sectors of Eastern Europe in 2007 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the electricity consumption in different sectors of Eastern Europe in 2007 and 2010. Lpgr
The provided pie charts compare Eastern Europe's electricity uses proportion in six different sectors in two different years. ( in 2007 and 2010) Overall, over the three years period, minor changes are observed in electricity consumption. In both years, approximately half proportion of electricity was consumed for Residential and Commercial sectors whereas, least amount of electricity was consumed for Transport and Agriculture. According to the given data, in 2007 residential and commercial sectors separately consumed around a quarter proportion of electricity, which was 28% and 23% respectively. However, Aluminium, Manufacturing, Other metals and Mining, each one consumed less than half proportion electricity, compared to Residential consumption. While merely 1% and 0. 80% electricity was used by Transport and Agriculture field respectively. As per the 2010 pie chart, over the three years period, other metal consumption of electricity escalated by 6%, from 12. 30% to 18. 30%. Likewise, Mining consumption rose by just 0. 4% from 9%. On the contrary, Aluminium and Manufacturing electricity use dropped by 2% to 4%. While, remaining sectors consumption was stabilized on same level.
The provided pie charts compare Eastern Europe's
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As per the 2010 pie chart, over the three years period, other metal
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