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proportion of population aged 65 and over

proportion of population aged 65 and over xnBN
the line graph gives data about the percentage of people who are 65 years old and more through a 100 year period beginning from the 1940 in Japan, Sweden and USA. In generall, there was an upward trend in countries. Also, this rate in Japan was the highest. In the year 1940, the ratio of population of 65 and more in America was the highest, with nearly 10%, roughly twice as much as the number for Japan, while only about nearly 7. 5% the Sweden
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period beginning from the 1940 in Japan, Sweden and USA. In
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, there was an upward trend in countries.
Also
, this rate in Japan was the highest. In the year 1940, the ratio of population of 65 and more in America was the highest, with
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10%, roughly twice as much as the number for Japan, while
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7. 5% the Sweden
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IELTS academic proportion of population aged 65 and over

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