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The given pie-diagrams depict the proportion of the children taking admission in North-West University. To giving the overview of the pie-diagram, the first pie-chart shows that the students choosing arts stream are more than students going in other streams. First and foremost, the students who took admission in the University for the business stream was 14%. The percentage of students who choose science stream was 21% and the scholars who get in computing were similar as science stream. In Engineering faculty there was 9%, in Medical stream there was 5% and in law there was 6% of the students who these field. The percentage of students who took Arts field for their further studies was 23%. Most of the students were South American (79%). The under-graduates from Europe were 21%. 6% of the students in arts stream were from Asia. From Africa 2% and from Australia 4% students choose Arts field. There were no scholars from US for the Arts stream.
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. In Engineering faculty there was 9%, in Medical
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