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The diagram below shows the various stages involved in producing whiskey from malt barley

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The image indicates several phases to manufacture whiskey from malt barely. Overall, the process starts with growing of malt barely and ends with consumption of final product. In total there are 12 steps which requiring different machinery and some manual work. First of all, the malt barely is grown and after that it harvested. The harvested malt barely is then putted in machine for preparation before adding to another piece of machinery where it is mashed. Following that, another machine is used to fermentation of the mashed malt barely. After fermentation, the malt barely turned to first and second distillation machines. From this, the resulting substance moved to next step, which is ageing, to send to the next one which is bottling by automated machine. After bottling, it delivered to be traded and subsequently consumed.
The image indicates several phases to manufacture whiskey from
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malt
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Overall
, the process
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starts
with growing of
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malt
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barely
and ends with consumption of final product. In total there are 12 steps which requiring
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different
machinery and
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some
manual work.

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First of all
, the
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malt
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barely
is grown
and after that it harvested. The harvested
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malt
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barely
is then putted in
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machine
for preparation
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before
adding to another piece of machinery where it
is mashed
. Following that, another
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machine
is
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used
to fermentation of the mashed
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malt
barely
.

After fermentation, the
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malt
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barely
turned to
first
and second distillation
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machines
. From this, the resulting substance
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moved
to
next
step, which is
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ageing
, to
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send
to the
next
one which is bottling by automated
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machine
. After bottling, it delivered to
be traded
and
subsequently
consumed.

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