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The pie charts shows the online sector of retail sector in Canada between 2005 and 2010.

The pie charts shows the online sector of retail sector in Canada between 2005 and 2010. JVXyD
Online sales for retail sectors in Canada. The two pie charts depict the differences in the amounts of online sales across various retail areas in Canada in the years 2005 and 2010. As we can observe that 35% of online retail of electronics and appliances in 2005 has been deducted to 30% by 2010. While the sales of food and beverages being 22% in 2005, has been increased to 32% by 2010, during the 5 years. It made the highest proportion of the online retail sector in 2010. The next highest percentage in 2005, is 25% of the sales of home furnishings enterprises which vastly decreased to 15% by 2010. The online video games sales were 18% in 2005, shockingly increased to 23% by 2010.
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for
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sectors in Canada.

The two pie charts depict the differences in the amounts of
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online
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sales
across various
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retail
areas in Canada in the years 2005 and 2010. As we can observe that 35% of
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online
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retail
of electronics and appliances in 2005 has
been deducted
to 30% by 2010. While the
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sales
of food and beverages being 22% in 2005, has
been increased
to 32% by 2010, during the 5 years. It made the highest proportion of the
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online
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retail
sector in 2010.

The
next
highest percentage in 2005, is 25% of the
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sales
of home furnishings enterprises which
vastly
decreased to 15% by 2010. The
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online
video games
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sales
were 18% in 2005,
shockingly
increased to 23% by 2010.
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