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The graph shows the number of cases of x disease in Someland between the years 1960 and 1995.

The given line graph illustrates the information about the count of x disease case from 1960 to 1995 in Someland region. Overall, it is evident that it was seen an upward and downward trend in the number of cases over the period of more than 3 decades. To begin with, in the initial year merely 100 cases were found in Someland of x disease patients and it remained same till next 5 years after that it had experienced a gradual increase by 1970 which was 200 cases. Over the period of half decade, count of cases were rose rapidly which reached at its peak with 500 and stayed the same till 1980. Moving further to next year, after stable situation, it was noticed a moderate decline in the number of cases throught the period of 5 years. while cases count was 400 in 1985 whereas it had fallen steadily to 0 in 1990, it means there was not any case of x disease in Someland in the end of the period.
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line graph illustrates the information about the count of x disease case from 1960 to 1995 in Someland region.

Overall
, it is evident that it was
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seen
an upward and downward trend in the number of cases over the
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period
of more than 3 decades.

To
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begin
with, in the initial
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merely
100 cases
were found
in Someland of x disease patients and it remained same till
next
5 years after that it had experienced a gradual increase by 1970 which was 200 cases. Over the
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period
of half decade, count of cases were rose
rapidly
which reached at its peak with 500 and stayed the same till 1980.

Moving
further
to
next
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year
, after stable situation, it
was noticed
a moderate decline in the number of cases throught the
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period
of 5 years. while cases count was 400 in 1985 whereas it had fallen
steadily
to 0 in 1990, it means there was not any case of x disease in Someland in the
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end
of the
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period
.

IELTS academic The graph shows the number of cases of x disease in Someland between the years 1960 and 1995.

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