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The graph shows the no of boys and girls playing sports

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The bar chart illustrates how many children, divided by gender, played six kinds of sports (tennis, badminton, cycling, swimming, football and hockey) in a town in England in 2012. Overall, the number of boys playing sport exceeded that of girls in the given period and the sport with the most significant difference between the genders was football. Football was also the most popular sport for boys while the majority of girls preferred swimming. Furthermore, both males and females least preferred playing hockey. There were four sports in which boys participated more than girls. While 60 boys played football, the number of girls playing that sport was considerably lower (around 20). With regards to tennis, the figure for boys who played that sport was 50 as opposed to just under 40 for girls. Similarly, more boys cycled than girls (approximately 35and 20 respectively). The difference, in terms of hockey, was minimal with only about 5 more boys playing that sport than girls. On the other hand, more girls took part in the two remaining sports which both showed a difference of about 10 between the genders. As many as 50 girls preferred swimming in comparison to 40 girls for badminton.
The bar chart illustrates how
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many
children, divided by gender, played six kinds of
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sports
(tennis, badminton, cycling, swimming,
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football
and hockey) in a town in England in 2012.
Overall
, the number of
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boys
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playing
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sport
exceeded that of
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girls
in the
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given
period and the
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with the most significant difference between the genders was
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football
.
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Football
was
also
the most popular
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sport
for
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boys
while the majority of
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girls
preferred swimming.
Furthermore
, both males and females least preferred
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playing
hockey. There were four
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sports
in which
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boys
participated more than
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girls
. While 60
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boys
played
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football
, the number of
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girls
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playing
that
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sport
was
considerably
lower (around 20).
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tennis, the figure for
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boys
who played that
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was 50 as opposed to
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under 40 for
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.
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cycled than
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(approximately 35and 20
respectively
). The difference, in terms of hockey, was minimal with
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about 5 more
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boys
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playing
that
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sport
than
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.
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girls
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took part
in the two remaining
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which both
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showed
a difference of about 10 between the genders. As
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as 50
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preferred swimming
in comparison
to 40
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girls
for badminton.
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