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The graph shows the criminal conviction in the UK by age and gender.

The graph shows the criminal conviction in the UK by age and gender. 9rn30
A glance at the graph provided reveals some striking distinctions of the sentences of offenders on the basis of their age and sex of the UK citizens. Overall, it is evident that each indicator of gender starts and ends with the same percentage and their exponential growth refers to at the age of 20. Regarding to men's convictions at 10 years, it reveals 2%. The next following decade makes up a rapid climb that is 16 percent at the age of 20. The latter 40 years, however, brings sustained decline in this figure that ends with 2% at 60. With respect to the percentage of female's indicator it starts 0% at the beginning of a period and climbs conciderably to 5 % at 20. It slides away to 4% and remained stable over 4 years. The next 30 years depicts steady dexlone and ends 0 % respectively with the behinning at 60.
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striking distinctions of the sentences of offenders on the basis of their age and sex of the UK citizens.
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