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The graph shows the contribution of UK economy . Summarise the information.

The graph shows the contribution of UK economy. g5q37
The bar chart illustrates information irrespect to three sectors (Agricultural, manufacturing and Business and finance ) contribution to British economic growth within the period of 100 years. And units were measured in percentage. Overall, it can be seen vividly that agricultural and manufacturing sectors were the main contributors in the first half of the century. However their contribution dropped dramatically, while business and finance rose rapidly to become the main contributor. In terms of agricultural sector, their contribution rose from around 50% to 55% within the year 1900 to 1950, and was the major contributor as opposed to Business and financial which contributed just about 5% in 1900 and raised to just approximately 10% in the year 1950, therefore was the least contributor within the first half of the century. While in the 2nd half of the century, Business and finance rose rapidly from 20% to 40% between 1975 and 2000 respectively and became the leading contributing sector to the British economy as contrast to Agricultural sector that falls dramatically to less than 2% and became the least contributor to the economy. Whereas manufacturing service dropped steady and remains at about 15% within the year 1975 to 2000
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sectors
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(Agricultural
, manufacturing and
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Business
and finance
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contribution to British economic growth within the period of 100 years. And units
were measured
in percentage.

Overall
, it can be
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vividly
that
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agricultural
and manufacturing
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sectors
were the main
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contributors
in the
first
half of the century.
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However
their contribution dropped
dramatically
, while
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business
and finance rose
rapidly
to become the main contributor.

In terms of
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agricultural
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sector
, their contribution rose from around 50% to 55% within the
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year
1900 to 1950, and was the major
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contributor
as opposed to
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Business
and financial which contributed
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about 5% in 1900 and raised to
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just
approximately 10% in the
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year
1950,
therefore
was the least
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contributor
within the
first
half of the century.

While in the 2nd half of the century,
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Business
and finance rose
rapidly
from 20% to 40% between 1975 and 2000
respectively
and became the leading contributing
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sector
to the British economy as contrast to
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Agricultural
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sector
that falls
dramatically
to less than 2% and became the least
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contributor
to the economy. Whereas manufacturing service dropped steady and remains at about 15% within the
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year
1975 to 2000
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