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The chart summarises the number of nurses in different department in Sunnyside Hospital

The chart summarises the number of nurses in different department in Sunnyside Hospital r8b92
The bar chart provides information about the number of nurses in subdivision ( Emergency, Theatre, Maternity and Cardiac unit) in Sunnyside Hospital between 2016 and 2018. Overall, it is evident that, maternity department had almost the same number of nurses while other units experience fluctuations within the period. To begin, Theatre had the highest number is nurses of about 60 in the year 2018 while Cardiac unit recorded the least (30) in year 2016. Meanwhile, Emergency and Cardiac unit had the same number of nurses of about 50 in the year 2016 and 2017 respectively. However, while other units experienced marked fluctuations, there was no significant difference between the nurses that worked in Maternity unit throughout the period. Whereas, 2017 outnumbered other years by 2nurses.
The bar chart provides information about the
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, Maternity and Cardiac
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in Sunnyside Hospital between 2016 and 2018.

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while other
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experience fluctuations within the period.

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Theatre
had the highest
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is
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of about 60 in the
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year
2018 while Cardiac
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recorded the least (30) in
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2016. Meanwhile, Emergency and Cardiac
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had the same
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of
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nurses
of about 50 in the
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2016 and 2017
respectively
.

However
, while other
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units
experienced marked fluctuations, there was no significant difference between the
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nurses
that worked in Maternity
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unit
throughout the period.
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IELTS academic The chart summarises the number of nurses in different department in Sunnyside Hospital

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