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the graph shows population for India and China since the year 2000 and predicted population growth up until 2050

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The given line graph compares figures of population for India and China between 2000 and 2050. It is clear that both countries showed the lowest percentage in 2000 whereas they are likely to demonstrate an upward trend till the next 50 years. In 2000 India had 1 billion population while in this year there was 1, 2 billion citizens in China. After a decade the number of Indian people rose to 200 million, so total population was 1, 2 billion in the year 2010. But in this year Chinese government had approximately 200 million more inhabitants than Indians, it means they were about 1, 4 billion. It is worth to note that both countries will be intersected in 2030 which shows just over 1, 4 billion respectively. Finally, according to line graph India will have 1, 6 billion population in 2050 whereas the government of China will have 200 million less citizens than India, it means they will have 1, 4 billion population in 2050.
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line graph compares figures of
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for India and China between 2000 and 2050. It is
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that both countries
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the lowest percentage in 2000 whereas they are likely to demonstrate an upward trend till the
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50 years.

In 2000 India had 1
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while in this year there was 1, 2
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citizens in China. After a decade the number of Indian
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people
rose to 200 million,
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total
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was 1, 2
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in the year 2010.
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in this year Chinese
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government
had approximately 200 million more inhabitants than Indians, it means they were about 1, 4
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billion
. It is worth to note that both countries will
be intersected
in 2030 which
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shows
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over 1, 4
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respectively
.
Finally
, according to line graph India will have 1, 6
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in 2050 whereas the
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government
of China will have 200 million
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citizens than India, it means they will have 1, 4
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in 2050.
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IELTS academic the graph shows population for India and China since the year 2000 and predicted population growth up until 2050

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