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The diagram illustrates how bees produce honey.

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The diagram, demonstrates how the honey is produced within the seven stages To being with, in the first stage bees has to build a hive from which they travels in search of flowers, when the flower is found by the group of bees moving on to the next stage bees land on the flowers and extract nectar from the flowers. Once nectar has be collected bees travels back to the hive with all the collected nectar and inserts in to the cells of the hive, as bees flaps wings the warm air is generated due to which evaporation occurs and water is evaporated from the cells and which results in to honey. Hence the cycle continues. Overall, the process is lengthy and simple from flower to the hives, flower plays a vital role in the process of honey-making.
The diagram, demonstrates how the honey
is produced
within the seven stages

To
being
with, in the
first
stage bees
has to
build a hive from which they
travels
in search of
flowers
, when the
flower
is found
by the group of bees moving on to the
next
stage bees land on the
flowers
and extract nectar from the
flowers
. Once nectar has
be collected
bees travels back to the hive with all the collected nectar and inserts in to the cells of the hive, as bees flaps wings the warm air
is generated
due to which evaporation occurs and water
is evaporated
from the cells and which results in to honey.
Hence
the cycle continues.
Overall
, the process is lengthy and simple from
flower
to the hives,
flower
plays a vital role in the process of honey-making.
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IELTS academic The diagram illustrates how bees produce honey.

Academic
  American English
2 paragraphs
138 words
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