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The graph shows detail about the number of people hire books in Britain local library in 2009.

The graph shows detail about the number of people hire books in Britain local library in 2009. D2EmW
The bar graph provide details about the proportion of books rented in Britain local library in year 2009. Undoubtedly, the data has been calibrated in numbers. Looking from an overall perspective, it is readily apparent that February, March and November display an downward tendency whereas large ratio of books rented in August and December. To began with first month of 2009 10 books are hire in January. Unfortunately, the data fell dramatically in February and accounted to 6. The proportion of March and April was 7 and 13 respectively. Surprisingly, in March and July the ratio was absolutely same. Number of books rented in June was 14 the data magnificently higher in August woth 20. In September 12 books are hiring from library. Data was fluctuated in October and November and accounted to 14 and 9. Finally, in December mostly inhabitants hired textbooks from book room the ratio was 21.
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rented in Britain local library in year 2009.
Undoubtedly
, the
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data
has
been calibrated
in numbers.

Looking from an
overall
perspective, it is
readily
apparent that February, March and November display
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an
downward tendency whereas large ratio of
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books
rented in August and December.

To began with
first
month of 2009 10
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books
are hire in January. Unfortunately, the
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data
fell
dramatically
in February and accounted to 6. The proportion of March and April was 7 and 13
respectively
.
Surprisingly
, in March and July the ratio was
absolutely
same. Number of
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rented in June was 14 the
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data
magnificently
higher in August
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woth
20.

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In September
12
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are hiring from library.
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Data
was fluctuated
in October and November and accounted to 14 and 9.
Finally
, in December
mostly
inhabitants hired textbooks from
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room the ratio was 21.

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