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two charts given about export of a country. One table shows percentage change in values 2015- 2016

two charts given about export of a country. One table shows percentage change in values 2015- 2016 5bQAV
The given chart and table illustrates export value of 5 different category, along with percentage, of a country in the year 2015 and 2016. The data shows 5 different category of export items (petroleum products, Engineered goods, Gems and jewellery, agricultural products and textiles ) in billions. Overall except gems and jewellery all the other items have seen increase in export percentage in 2016 compared to 2015. The minimum difference is in agricultural product category and major positive change in export percentage is evident in textiles that is 15. 24% up in 2016. Engineered goods rose up to 8. 5% which is not huge but can be considered significant. However when we see at petroleum products it need more attention if this country wants to increase the export values. It bags second last position in least performing category after agricultural products.
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chart and table illustrates
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export
value of 5
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different
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category
, along with percentage, of a country in the year 2015 and 2016. The data
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shows
5
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different
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category
of
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export
items (petroleum
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products
, Engineered
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goods
, Gems and
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jewellery
, agricultural
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products
and textiles
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)
in billions.

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except gems and
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jewellery
all the other items have
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seen
increase in
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export
percentage in 2016 compared to 2015. The minimum difference is in agricultural
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product
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category
and major
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positive
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change
in
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export
percentage is evident in textiles
that is
15. 24% up in 2016.

Engineered
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goods
rose up to 8. 5% which is not huge
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but
can
be considered
significant.
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However
when we
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see
at petroleum
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products
it
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need
more attention if this country wants to increase the
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export
values. It bags second last position in
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least
performing
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category
after agricultural
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products
.

IELTS academic two charts given about export of a country. One table shows percentage change in values 2015- 2016

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  American English
3 paragraphs
141 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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