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The graph shows changes in the number of people who visited to three museums in London over the period from June to September 2013.

The graph shows changes in the number of people who visited to three museums in London over the period from June to September 2013. jVQ2L
The graph shows changes in the number of people who visited to three museums in London over the period from June to September 2013. Overall, the period saw slight changes in the numbers of visitors to all three museums, with an increase observed for the British Museum and Science Museum and a decrease for the Natural History Museum. In June, the British Museum had the highest number of visitors with 600, 000, which was followed by the Natural History Museum and the Science Museum with 550, 000 and 400, 000 visitors, respectively. The British Museum still had the highest number of visitors in September, with 650, 000 visitors. However, there were considerable fluctuations in these figures. The figures first climbed substantially to 750, 000 in July then witnessed a decline of 250, 000 in the next month. The number of visitors to the Science Museum also went down slightly in the first three months, but thereafter increased to 450, 000 in September, which was the lowest of all. In contrast, the number of visitors to the Natural History Museum followed a decreasing pattern. The figures declined to under 400, 000 in July and remained stable until August before rising to about 460, 000 in September, being the second highest.
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in London over the period from June to September 2013.

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and a decrease for the Natural History Museum.

In June, the British
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with 600, 000, which
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and the Science
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with 550, 000 and 400, 000
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followed a decreasing pattern. The figures declined to under 400, 000 in July and remained stable until August
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rising to about 460, 000 in September, being the second highest.
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