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the graph shown below shows the average carbon emissions of the United kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal.

the graph shown below shows the average carbon emissions of the United kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal. mLGDd
The provided line-graph depicted the change in average carbon emissions of 4 countries over a period of 40 years, from 1967 to 2007. The trend of average carbon dioxide emission per person is variable for every country. Some countries like the United Kingdom and Sweden had reduced their carbon footprint considerably whereas others like Italy and Portugal had done the exact opposite. In 1967, the United Kingdom lead the tally with around 11 metric tonnes of carbon dioxide emissions. Sweden was second, with a share of around 8. 5-9 metric tonnes. An average Italian person only emitted 4. 1 metric tonnes whereas Portugese had the least carbon footprint with 1. 9 metric tonnes. In 2007, however, the carbon dioxide emission by an average Britisher soared to 8. 5 metric tonnes. The graph for an average UK citizen shows a gradual down slope over the past 40 years. For Sweden on the other hand, a sharp upstroke was noticed from 1967 to 1977 of around 2 metric tonnes, which steeply reduced by 3 metric tonnes to around 6. 5 metric tonnes in 1987. In 20 years, from 1987 to 2007 however, there was a gradual fall in numbers and in 2007, only 6 metric tonnes on an average were contributed. Italy and Portugal both had a steep increase in their emissions from 1967 to 1997. Portugal had a steeper slope than Italy beginning from 1. 8 and inclining till 5. 8 metric tonnes. The rate however, plateaued from 1997 to 2007. Italy also had 4 metric tonnes share per person which progressed to 8 metric tonnes over a period of 30 years and stabilised from 1997 to 2007. Overall, the emission by an average United Kingdom resident still surpasses other countries. However, it can be safely presumed that with declining numbers Britishers might not remain at the top. Sweden is one such example of significant change. However, Italy and Portugal need to implement stringent measures to reduce or stabilize their overall output.
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whereas others like Italy and Portugal had done the exact opposite.

In 1967, the United Kingdom lead the tally with
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11 metric tonnes of
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dioxide
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. Sweden was second, with a share of
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8. 5-9 metric tonnes. An
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Italian person
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footprint with 1. 9 metric tonnes.

In 2007,
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Britisher soared to 8. 5 metric tonnes. The graph for an
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UK citizen
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a gradual down slope over the past 40 years. For Sweden
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6. 5 metric tonnes in 1987. In 20 years, from 1987 to 2007
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were contributed
. Italy and Portugal both had a steep increase in their
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from 1967 to 1997. Portugal had a steeper slope than Italy beginning from 1. 8 and inclining till 5. 8 metric tonnes. The rate
however
, plateaued from 1997 to 2007. Italy
also
had 4 metric tonnes share per person which progressed to 8 metric tonnes over a period of 30 years and
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from 1997 to 2007.

Overall
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still
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, it can be
safely
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, Italy and Portugal need to implement stringent measures to
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their
overall
output.

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