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The diagram shows the lifecycle of honeybee.

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The flow chart illustrates the development of a honeybee from egg during its life cycle. Overall, it is clear that there are three distinct stages demonstrated in the process, commencing with laying eggs and ending with the development of a mature bee. The first stage is when the legs are layed by the female bees. As well as, this action is repeated in every three days. Before hatching, bees develop in the eggs, so it takes 9-10 days. Eventually, after hatching, the period of little bee starts, and so as to mature bee moults its nymph three times. The first is after hatching and second one is in the 23 days of honeybee's life. At this point of the cycle, the size of honeybee becomes much bigger, but looking and shape of bee do not have striking resemblance with first its 15 days of life. Gradually, in the third hatching stage, young adult honeybee appears. In this step, compared to the one stage before, honeybee has black lines and antennas. Moreover, honeybee's colour is much more light. Finally, after four days, honeybee is fully mature. Having completed all this steps, the life cycle then begins again.
The flow chart illustrates the development of a honeybee from egg during its life cycle.

Overall
, it is
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clear
that there are three distinct
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stages
demonstrated in the process, commencing with laying eggs and ending with the development of a mature bee.

The
first
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stage
is when the legs are
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layed
by the female bees.
As well
as, this action
is repeated
in every three days.
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Before
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hatching
, bees develop in the eggs,
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so
it takes 9-10 days.
Eventually
, after
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hatching
, the period of
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little
bee
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starts
, and
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mature bee
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moults
its nymph three times. The
first
is after
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hatching
and second one is in the 23 days of honeybee's life. At this point of the cycle, the size of honeybee becomes much bigger,
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but
looking and shape of bee do not have striking resemblance with
first
its 15 days of life.

Gradually
, in the third
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hatching
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stage
, young adult honeybee appears. In this step, compared to the one
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stage
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before
, honeybee has black lines and antennas.
Moreover
, honeybee's
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colour
is much more light.
Finally
, after four days, honeybee is
fully
mature. Having completed all this steps, the life cycle then
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begins
again.
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IELTS academic The diagram shows the lifecycle of honeybee.

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196 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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