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The graph illustrats the amount of the workforce that are employed in four industries(in percent) in a city in the periode of 30 years (from 1980 to 2010) Overall,workforce of the part finance technology and retail had a increase trend while for finance workfoce had been seen a reduce trend.

The graph illustrats the amount of the workforce that are employed in four industries(in percent) in a city in the periode of 30 years (from 1980 to 2010) Overall, workforce of the part finance technology and retail had a increase trend while for finance workfoce had been seen a reduce trend. x0eGa
The graph illustrats the amount of the workforce that are employed in four industries(in percent) in a city in the periode of 30 years (from 1980 to 2010)Overall, workforce of the part finance technology and retail had a increase trend while for finance workfoce had been seen a reduce trend. In 1980 to 1990 the workforce employed in part of finance, technology and retail had a gradually increase from about 3% to 6%; In 1990 to 2000, technology and retail part imperienced a slowly incline from approximately 6% to about 6. 5% and 3% to 5% and the part of finance had sharply raise from about 7% to 14%. In 2000 to 2010 the part of retail had constantly trend in 5%, the part of Technology saw modecately increas from 6% to 10% and finance had a slowly incline from14% to 15%. For the part of marufacturing, the trend had moderately decrease fom approximately 25% to 7. 5%.
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