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the diagram shows the stages in the production of yogurt

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The diagram illustrates the various stages in which yogurt is produced. In general, it can be seen that the yogurt-making process has four main steps, beginning with the raw materials being mixed together in a container, then treated at different temperatures, and ending with the ready yogurt being packed. At the first stage, the mix of stabilizers, dry milk, and sugar is poured into a sanitary stainless milk container made from steel. After this concoction has been heated to 85 degrees Celsius, it’s covered by a lid and then left to cool to 42 degrees Celsius. Following this homogenization process, the production enters the next stage of production, commonly known as fermentation. It’s at this stage that cultures are added to the vessel before the mixture is blended and kept at 7 degrees Celsius. Once the fermentation process is complete, the liquid is finally ready to be put into yogurt jars.
The diagram illustrates the various
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stages
in which yogurt
is produced
.
In general
, it can be
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seen
that the yogurt-making process has four main steps, beginning with the raw materials
being mixed
together in a container, then treated at
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different
temperatures, and ending with the ready yogurt
being packed
.

At the
first
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stage
, the mix of stabilizers, dry milk, and sugar
is poured
into a sanitary stainless milk container made from steel. After this concoction has
been heated
to 85 degrees Celsius, it’s covered by a lid and then
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
left
to cool to 42 degrees Celsius.

Following this homogenization process, the production enters the
next
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stage
of production,
commonly
known as fermentation. It’s at this
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stage
that cultures are
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added
to the vessel
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before
the mixture
is blended
and
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kept
at 7 degrees Celsius. Once the fermentation process is complete, the liquid is
finally
ready to
be put
into yogurt jars.
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