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Spending on tourist infrastructure by four different europen countries

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The line graph demonstrates the amount of money spent on tourist infrastructure in four different countries in Europe over a 12 year period between 1980 and 1992. Overall, it can be seen that whereas the UK and France increased their spending on tourism over the period, Spain witnessed a fall in investment up until 1990 before recovering. In Germany, meanwhile, financial support for tourism rose before slipping after 1990. Focussing on uk and France, although the former began the period by spending about 58million euros on tourism, the latter started at just one third of this figure. However, despite tourism investment rising in both nations, the figure in 1992 was the same for each at 80 million euros, which was the highest spent in a single year by any other nation during the period. In contrast, the Spanish decreased their spending on touristic developments over the 1980's, with investment slumping from 60 million euros to around 48 million. This sum then jumped back to 60 million in 1992. German government, conversely, raised spending in the 80s from 30 million to 48 million, after which the figure dropped to 40 million.
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period between 1980 and 1992.

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over the period, Spain witnessed a fall in investment up until 1990
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recovering. In Germany, meanwhile, financial support for
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rose
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slipping after 1990.

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one third of this figure.
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investment rising in both nations, the figure in 1992 was the same for each at 80
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euros, which was the highest spent in a single year by any other nation during the period.

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spending
on touristic developments over the
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euros to around 48
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. This sum then jumped back to 60
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in 1992. German
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IELTS academic Spending on tourist infrastructure by four different europen countries

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