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The graph illustrates the proportion of people in various age groups who lived in Australia and joined physical exercises regularly in 2010.

The graph illustrates the proportion of people in various age groups who lived in Australia and joined physical exercises regularly in 2010. GJ9Lw

Overall, it can be seen that the highest percentage of doing sports belonged women. Furthermore, younger men were more active than older men, while younger women were less active than older women. The percentage of 15 to 24 and 65+ years old groups of women who did sports had almost the same rate (about %47. 7 and %47. 1 respectively). The women whose ages were between 45 and 54 accounted for the highest proportion with %53. 3. In terms of the figure of men who did physical activity regularly in 2010, the rates were close to each other among the age groups 25 to 34, 35 to 44 and 45 to 54 (about %42. 2, %39. 5, and %43. 2 sequentially). The group of men who were in the 15 to 24 years age group accounted for the highest proportion of doing sports regularly with %52. 8.

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