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GIVEN THE INFORMATION FROM THE BAR GRAPH WRITE A SUMMARY.

GIVEN THE INFORMATION FROM THE BAR GRAPH WRITE A SUMMARY. Jqw3k
The bar graph dipicts the amount of olympic medals won by China, USA, Russia from 2004 to 2016. The information provided clearly shows the fluctuations in the amount of medals won by all the 3 countries in the given period of time. Staring from China, back in 2004 China had won 60 medals in the olympics, which is the lowest among the three countries. United States had won 100 medals and Russia had won 90 medals. In 2008 olympics China elevated from 60 to a little less than 100 wins and was the highest they had won till 2016. United STATES HAD A SLIGHT IMPROVEMENT AS THE NUMBERS WENT UP FROM 100 TO 110 WINS. In contrast to United States, Russia has experienced a major dip with only 60 wins. in 2012 all of the 3 countires had faced a decline in the medals. But it had gotten worse for China and Russia by 2016 as they only won 70 and a little less than 60 medals respectively, whereas the United States had won the highest number of medals, standing tall at 120 medals in the olympics in 2016.
The bar graph
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dipicts
the amount of
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olympic
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medals
won by China, USA, Russia from 2004 to 2016. The information provided
clearly
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shows
the fluctuations in the amount of
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medals
won by all the 3 countries in the
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given
period of time. Staring from China, back in 2004 China had won 60
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medals
in the
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olympics
, which is the lowest among the three countries.
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United
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States
had won 100
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medals
and Russia had won 90
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medals
. In 2008
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olympics
China elevated from 60 to a
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less than 100 wins and was the highest they had won till 2016.
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United
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STATES
HAD A SLIGHT IMPROVEMENT AS THE NUMBERS WENT UP FROM 100 TO 110 WINS.
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United
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States
, Russia has experienced a major dip with
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only
60 wins.
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in
2012
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all of the
3
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countires
had faced a decline in the
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medals
.
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But
it had gotten worse for China and Russia by 2016 as they
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only
won 70 and a
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less than 60
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medals
respectively
, whereas the
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United
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States
had won the highest number of
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medals
, standing tall at 120
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in the
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in 2016.

IELTS academic GIVEN THE INFORMATION FROM THE BAR GRAPH WRITE A SUMMARY.

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