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The graph illustrates the money spent by the british people on fist in 1990 and the intake of three junk foods over 30 years

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The graph illustrates the money spent by the british people on fist in 1990 and the intake of three junk foods over 30 years. The money spent is given in pence for each person in a week whereas the intake is prosented in gram per person. The bar graph shows hamburgers were majorly bought by the british, while the low-income class spect on fish and Chips. A wealthy person spent around 45 pence on hamburger and less than 15 pence on other two items. Similarly the moderate-income class. preffered hamburgers, they only spent around 33 pence on them. They spent es pence on and fish Chips pizza • the as well and less than 15 pence of low income class mostly avoid junk foods, despite fish and chips being their famourite Moving to the consumption of audience humbwegers fish and chips were the most favourite among people, it gradually increased. 100 gm to 500gm over the 30 yeaves of time. While pizzer was the most popular in Knitt al years after the years were passed the popularidy Consumption goes down to 200 gram in Ppio.
The graph illustrates the money
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spent
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british
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people
on fist in 1990 and the intake of three junk foods over 30 years. The money
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spent
is
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given
in pence for each person in a week whereas the intake is
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prosented
in gram per person.

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The
bar graph
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shows
hamburgers were
majorly
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bought
by the
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british
, while the low-income
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class
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spect on
fish and Chips. A wealthy person
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spent
around 45 pence on hamburger and less than 15 pence on other two items.
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Similarly
the moderate-income
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class
.
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preffered
hamburgers, they
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only
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spent
around 33 pence on them. They
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spent
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es
pence on and fish Chips pizza • the
as well
and less than 15 pence of low income
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class
mostly
avoid junk foods, despite fish and chips being their
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famourite


Moving to the consumption of audience
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humbwegers
fish and chips were the most
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favourite
among
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people
, it
gradually
increased. 100 gm to 500gm over the 30
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yeaves
of time. While
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pizzer
was the most popular in
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Knitt
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al
years after the years
were passed
the
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popularidy
Consumption goes down to 200
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gram
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Ppio
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IELTS academic The graph illustrates the money spent by the british people on fist in 1990 and the intake of three junk foods over 30 years

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