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The graph demonstrates the consumption of different form of renewable energy in the six decades, particularly from 1949 - 2008. period almost

The graph demonstrates the consumption of different form of renewable energy in the six decades, particularly from 1949 - 2008. period almost o89lX
Overall it can be seen clearly that the total energy consumed is more than doubled over the period. All of renewable energy has many fluctuations during this time and there was the hydroelectric power being the most uses energy, while the wind was the least, so we can divide ino two groups. The first group includes hydroelectric power and wood, which was almost same rate in 1949 and then went through many ups and downs. In 2008, they matches again the values with proximate positions at around 2. The second group comprises biofuels and wind energy. Both lines show almost the same trend, the number of consumption remained at zero between 1949 anh 1980. And then, there was a slight rise in both from 1980 to 2000. Over 2000, the started increasing sharply and can become a serious competitors with both water anh timber energy. To summarise, in earlier stages, the wood àn hydroelectric power were the main sources of renewable energy and after around 2005, the usages of biofuel and wind increased while the total consumption of renewable energy went up over time
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seen
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that the total
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consumed is more than doubled over the period. All of renewable
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energy
has
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fluctuations during this time and there was the hydroelectric power being the most
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uses
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, while the wind was the least,
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we can divide
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two groups. The
first
group includes hydroelectric power and wood, which was almost same rate in 1949 and then went through
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many
ups and downs. In 2008, they
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matches
again the values with proximate positions at around 2. The second group comprises biofuels and wind
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energy
. Both lines
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almost the same trend, the number of consumption remained at zero between 1949
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1980. And then, there was a slight rise in both from 1980 to 2000. Over 2000, the
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started
increasing
sharply
and can become a serious
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with both water
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timber
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. To
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summarise
, in earlier stages, the wood
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àn
hydroelectric power were the main sources of renewable
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energy
and after around 2005, the usages of biofuel and wind increased while the total consumption of renewable
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energy
went up over
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time
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IELTS academic The graph demonstrates the consumption of different form of renewable energy in the six decades, particularly from 1949 - 2008. period almost

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