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The graph below shows the working hours for men and women in the developing world between the years 1998 and 2003.

The graph below shows the working hours for men and women in the developing world between the years 1998 and 2003. DwMnp

The given chart displays the figures for the labor time that human resource workers spent in the developing nations during the period of six years, starting from the year 1998. Generally, It can be observed from the chart that the employees in Mongolia worked the longest time than the remaining countries, whereas the laborers in South Africa worked the lowest time. Furthermore, the female workers took up the most labor time than average time. First of all, the average working hours of each of the mentioned countries was slightly more than 6 hours each day. Particularly, in Mongolia, the workers of both genders spent well over 8 hours per day. Moreover, the two genders of operative in countries such as Mexico, India, Republic of Korea, Madagascar, Mauritius consumed just over 6 hours per day, which compared with the number of additional hours spent by women. Regarding the two nations, Benin and South Africa, the workers of two genders worked between 4 and 6 hours daily. Consequently, women in Benin had the most additional time at work, timing at 145 minutes, which was 40 minutes more than Mexican women’s volume. Specifically, both statistics exceeded the usual number of extra hours, which was 69 minutes. Except for Mongolia, where women spent the minimum time for extra efforts with only 24 minutes, female employees in the rest of five nations had less bonus paid for labor time, ranging from 44 minutes to 65 minutes.

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