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The graph below shows the unemployment rates in Singapore and Korea between June 2000 and June 2006

The graph below shows the unemployment rates in Singapore and Korea between June 2000 and June 2006 E71bb
The line graph illustrates the of rates of people unemployed in Singapore and Korea from June 2000 to June 2006 which data indicated in the percentage of the workforce. Overall, the tendency of Singaporeans who were unemployed opposed to Korean, while Singapore was a dramatic downward and Korea significantly increased rates in the period given. Initially, Singapore hit the highest point, whereas Korea became the lowest unemployment in June 2000. With regards to the number of Singapore unemployed, it began peaked over 10% in the first year before exactly dropped to 6%, which equaled with Korea in five years later and then a little decline at less than 6% in the final year. In contrast, the amount of unemployment rate in Korea started at 2% in 2000, which moved to 6% in 2003 and then slightly fluctuated between 5% to 6% until the end of the period. Furthermore, both Singapore and Korea had the same pattern of their unemployment by a slight decrease at less than 6% from 2005 to 2006.
The line graph illustrates the of rates of
people
unemployed in Singapore and Korea from June 2000 to June 2006 which data indicated in the percentage of the workforce.

Overall
, the tendency of Singaporeans who
were unemployed
opposed to Korean, while Singapore was a dramatic downward and Korea
significantly
increased rates in the period
given
.
Initially
, Singapore hit the highest point, whereas Korea became the lowest unemployment in June 2000.

With regards to
the number of Singapore unemployed, it began peaked over 10% in the
first
year
before
exactly dropped to 6%, which equaled with Korea in five years later and then a
little
decline at less than 6% in the final year.

In contrast
, the amount of unemployment rate in Korea
started
at 2% in 2000, which
moved
to 6% in 2003 and then
slightly
fluctuated between 5% to 6% until the
end
of the period.
Furthermore
, both Singapore and Korea had the same pattern of their unemployment by a slight decrease at less than 6% from 2005 to 2006.
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the unemployment rates in Singapore and Korea between June 2000 and June 2006

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