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The graph below shows the rate of smoking per 1000 people in some land from 1960 to 2000

The line graph is display the smoking of rate per 1000 people in some land. The male and female were smoking between the years in 1960 to 2000 in some land. Over all is clear that, the number of male smokers were higher in number then female smokers from 1960 to 2000 but women smokers decreased steadity but female smokers number increased and in 2000To begin with, in 1960 only the 100 female were smoker as compare 600 male were smoker so 500 female smokers were less than to men. It was biggest different. After five years in 1965 women smokers rocked up 100 to 200 woman but the men smokers decreased. In 1975 females smokers were increasing near about 300 woman but same year male smokers were came down and all remain years woman and men smokers were sharply fell down. In the year of 2000 male and women smokers had stucked near about 200 in 1000 people

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some
 land. The male and You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfeminine
female
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some
 land. Over all is This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :apparent
clear
 that, the number of male smokers were A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.higher
higher in number
Comparison requires "than", not 'then' nor 'as'.than
then
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female
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but
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steadity
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but
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female
 smokers number increased and in 2000To This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :initiatecommence
begin
 with, in 1960 This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
only
 the 100 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfeminine
female
 were smoker as compare 600 male were smoker This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
 500 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfeminine
female
 smokers were less than to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsresidentscitizens
men
. It was A determiner is probably missing here: "the biggest".the biggest
biggest
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different
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but
 the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsresidentscitizens
men
 smokers decreased. In 1975 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withgirlmother
females
 smokers were increasing near about 300 woman This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
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year
 male smokers were Consider using a past participle here: "come".come
came
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