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The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured.

The diagram illustrates a process of mass noodles production. Overall, there are 8 steps and all of them are manufactured by machine. The first step is inserting the flour while the last step is putting a label to the finished product. First of all, massive amount of flour is being store to silos and then the next step is combining water, oil, and the flour. After that, through a roller, long dough sheets are being rolled and moving to a next step, which is the fourth step, the noodle dough is cut to dough strips by a machine. Next, the dough is shaped to a disc and going to the next step, the disc is fried by using oil and after the noodle is cooked then it is dried so it can move to the next step. Afterward, the cooked noodles are transfered to cups, where they add all of the vegetables and spices. Lastly, all of the cups are going to be labelled and sealed for the final process.
The diagram illustrates a process of mass
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noodles
production.
Overall
, there are 8
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steps
and all of them
are manufactured
by machine. The
first
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step
is inserting the flour while the last
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step
is putting a label to the finished product.

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First of all
, massive amount of flour is being store to silos and then the
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next
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step
is combining water, oil, and the flour. After that, through a roller, long
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dough
sheets are
being rolled
and moving to a
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next
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step
, which is the fourth
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step
, the
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noodle
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dough
is
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cut
to
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dough
strips by a machine.

Next
, the
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dough
is shaped
to a disc and going to the
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next
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step
, the disc
is fried
by using oil and after the
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noodle
is cooked
then it
is dried
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so
it can
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move
to the
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next
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step
. Afterward, the cooked
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noodles
are
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transfered
to cups, where they
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add
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all of the
vegetables and spices.
Lastly
,
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all of the
cups are going to
be labelled
and sealed for the final process.
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IELTS academic The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured.

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6.0
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