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The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Writing Task 1 Writing

First of all, there is an eye-catching difference between japan and the other two countries based on its sudden change in life expectancy during a decade in 2000’s. On one side, after Japan’s approximately 25% raise in elderly’s population in upcoming years, statistics show Sweden which, unlike Japan has an acceptable raise on proportion of population during 1960 to 1980. This proves that Japan did not have a large community of people aged more than 65-year-old in few decades ago. Continually, USA’s statics are similar to Sweden, however USA’s life expectancy decreased between 2000 and 2020 but on the other hand it rises again in future years. In conclusion, all of the countries that their statics were illustrated in this graph had one similar point which was a positive raise of elderly’s community by 2030 which in japan occurs rapidly meanwhile in the other two countries this change seems to be smooth due to their previous addition.

Often, this adverbial phrase is redundant. Consider using “first”.First
First of all
, there is an eye-catching difference between This noun needs to be capitalized if you mean the country “Japan”.Japan
japan
 and the other two countries based on its sudden This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :alteradjust
change
 in life expectancy during a decade The article is probably missing here: “in the 2000’s”.in the 2000’s
in 2000’s
.

On one side, after You use this word too often, consider replacing it withglazevarnishlacquerstaincoating
Japan’s
 approximately 25% raise in elderly’s population in upcoming years, statistics This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :demonstrateportrayindicatedisplay
show
 Sweden which, unlike You use this word too often, consider replacing it withglazevarnishlacquerstaincoating
Japan
 has an acceptable raise on proportion of population during 1960 to 1980. This proves that You use this word too often, consider replacing it withglazevarnishlacquerstaincoating
Japan
 did not have a large community of This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 aged more than 65-year-This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:ancientagedmature
old
 in few decades ago.

Continually
, USA’s statics are similar to Sweden, however
 USA’s life expectancy decreased between 2000 and 2020 This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
on the other hand
 it rises again in future years.

In conclusion
, Consider using “all the”.all the
all of the
 countries that their statics were illustrated
 in this graph had one similar point which was a This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:beneficial
positive
 raise of elderly’s community by 2030 which in This noun needs to be capitalized if you mean the country “Japan”.Japan
japan
 occurs rapidly
 meanwhile in the other two countries this This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :alteradjust
change
 seems to be smooth due to their previous addition. 