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The charts below show the results of a survey about what people of different age groups say makes them most happy

The pie charts illustrate the consequences of a survey that how people of two distinct age groups feel glad. Overall, the factors success at work and doing hobbies are highest to make people pleased of all age groups. while, other unknown factors are lesser. Looking into details, 31% people are feel delighted with their achievement at work under 30 age groups. This figure is increase by 1% in older people. moreover, the second highest factor people made happy with doing hobbies among younger group, at 22%as compares to persons over 30 groups it is 24%. Furthermore, 18% individuals are experience happiness in having a good appearance within youngsters. But, less than 3% people are joyful at travelling in the same age groups. People are jubilant at other unknown factors which is 14% in adults and 10% among older group respectively. Afterward, persons made happy at financial security about 20% in above 30 age groups. Moreover, only 14% people feel glad living with family in similar age groups.
The pie charts illustrate the consequences of a survey that how
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IELTS academic The charts below show the results of a survey about what people of different age groups say makes them most happy

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5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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