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The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries

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The presented illustration of the line graph reveals the percentage of inhabitants in 3 dissimilar countries, under and over 65, from 1940 to 2040. Overall, it can be clearly that, the largest percentage will be Japan, also the second highest percentage will be Sweden. It is conspicuous that, the highest percentage was Japan from 1940 to 1980. Furthermore, the percentage of Japan fluctuated, however the proportion of residents aged 65 and over will go up in 2030, and accounted for 27%. The second largest proportion of the residents in Sweden, and reached 25% in 2040. On the contrary, the next country is the USA. The proportion of the eldery people in the USA fluctuated between 1940 and 2040. Even so, in 2040 will have increased dramatically. And rose to 23%.
The presented illustration of the line graph reveals the
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of inhabitants in 3 dissimilar countries, under and over 65, from 1940 to 2040.

Overall
, it can be
clearly
that, the largest
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percentage
will be Japan,
also
the second highest
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percentage
will be Sweden.

It is conspicuous that, the highest
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percentage
was Japan from 1940 to 1980.
Furthermore
, the
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percentage
of Japan fluctuated,
however
the proportion of residents aged 65 and over will go up in 2030, and accounted for 27%. The second largest proportion of the residents in Sweden, and reached 25% in 2040.

On the contrary
, the
next
country is the USA. The proportion of the
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eldery
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in the USA fluctuated between 1940 and 2040. Even
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, in 2040 will have increased
dramatically
. And rose to 23%.
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IELTS academic The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries

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