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The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between Between 2000 and 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between Between 2000 and 2009. DloEm
The table graph illustrate the second former school children attendance of four different schools in the year 2000, 2005 and 2009. Overall, it can be seen that the voluntary-controlled schools stood at the highest proportion in the beginning of the time period than other schools. however the specialist schools and accounted for lowest proportion by the end of the period. In the year 2000, the highest number of pupils attended to voluntary- controlled schools was 52 %. However, it had experienced a decline throughout the period by the end of the nine years it stood at the 20%. with regards to, the both specialist and community schools attendances are same in the beginning of the period (12% ). While separate schools the number of children's attending which was experienced a downward Trends throughout the period and stood at 10% in 2009. the community school has experience a upward trend throughout the period and stand at 58% in 2009. Grammar School, the attendances of the pupils accounted for second highest proportion at the beginning was the 24% and reduced of half to it in 2009.
The table graph illustrate the second former
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