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The given pie-charts illustrates how the local government spent the money on different sectors in 2010 and 2015.

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The given pie-charts illustrates how the local government spent the money on different sectors in 2010 and 2015. The data is calibrated in percentages. Looking from an overall perspective, it is clearly evident that education made the highest share in the both years. However, Health care occupies 21% in 2010, but 2015 it was slightly abated to 1%. surprisingly, the pensions sector was remains same in both the years. Moreover, Defence sector was slightly curtailed to 3% in in 2015 compared with 2010. Interestingly, welfare sector was escalated to 5% in 2015. However, interest on borrowing, culture and leisure abated to half percentage compared with previous one. Similarly, expenditure on transport was very less compared with 2015. To wrap up, in both the years Education made the highest proportion followed by Health care. However, others and pensions remains same.
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pie-charts illustrates how the local
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government
spent the money on
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sectors
in 2010 and 2015. The data
is calibrated
in percentages.

Looking from an
overall
perspective, it is
clearly
evident that education made the highest share in the both years.
However
, Health care occupies 21% in 2010,
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2015 it was
slightly
abated to 1%.
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surprisingly
, the pensions
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sector
was remains same in both the years.

Moreover
,
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Defence
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sector
was
slightly
curtailed to 3%
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in in
2015 compared with 2010.
Interestingly
, welfare
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sector
was escalated
to 5% in 2015.
However
, interest on borrowing, culture and leisure abated to half percentage compared with previous one.
Similarly
, expenditure on transport was
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very
less compared with 2015.

To wrap up, in both the years Education made the highest proportion followed by Health care.
However
, others and pensions remains same.
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IELTS academic The given pie-charts illustrates how the local government spent the money on different sectors in 2010 and 2015.

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